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SqueakyDeric
12-28-2003, 01:29 AM
Finally! A place to post my MI poetry!

Well, actually, there is only one poem so far.

But if the response is positive, who knows?...there could be a sequel.

OOA OA AH
By SqueakyDeric

Oaooa ooh ah ah ah
oo-ooo oa oa oa
oa...oh ooo
ah ah oooa-ooh
ooa OO AHAHAH aa ooa oo ah!:D


It is a monkey limerick...I considered translating it but it's just not the same.

Any feedback is welcome, since I am entering it in a poetry competition soon.

muskawo
12-28-2003, 03:32 AM
That brought a tear to my eye. So touching, so beautiful.

Just wondering though, where did you learn monkey so fluently? They don't teach it in any of the schools around here. Shame really.

Good luck with the poetry competition ;)

Alia
12-28-2003, 03:36 AM
I read it aloud to some bystanders, but I had some trouble pronoucing lines 2 and 3. Quite shocking, really.

SqueakyDeric
12-29-2003, 10:36 PM
Did you mention it was a poem, or did you just start shouting it at people? Because I made the same mistake, and was banned from my local Co-op.

(I always recite my poetry in supermarkets...for some reason they have the most sympathetic listeners).

Of course, if you mispronounce ooa it becomes a swearword (in monkey). Maybe the bystanders spoke monkey and thought you were swearing at them.

Thank you for your kind comments...sadly I can only speak Rhesus at the moment but I am thinking of taking an Open Uni course in Orang-Utan.

I will tell you how the competition goes, but usually they are full of closed-minded people who insist the poem must rhyme, or at least by in a human language. Fascists:(

Joshi
12-30-2003, 06:12 PM
I love the way you rhymed lines 1 2 and 5 as well as 3 and 4, pure genius. The rhythm was brilliant and the symbolism embodied in oo-ooo was pure awe inspiring.
The only drawback I'm afraid was your use of Oral sex in the last line, it may have been a tad bit unnessecary.

Oh, and I wrote a Monkey Island Haiku, tell me what you think.

OOk ook oo-ook ooa
oo oo lotus blossoms!
oo ooo oo oo ook

What do you think?

SqueakyDeric
12-30-2003, 11:09 PM
Charming. I may steal part of it for my next poem.

Oh, and sorry about that last line, it was a typo. There should have been a '-' in there, changing it completely. It should have meant 'kinky'.

Sorry for inflicting such filth upon you. I know you expect better in these forums.