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Acrylic
01-09-2005, 09:10 AM
A little poem I came up with a while ago:

She fell in love with a partisan,
She thought their life together just began,
After a while she couldn't commit,
She took a breath and ended it,
And thats the way the story goes,
One rose dries, another rose grows,
Another life gone, she didn't have to quit,
She didn't understand the half of it,
He could've stopped if he knew she cared,
A beautiful life they could've shared,
And thats the way the story ends,
And like a heavenless angel, his life descends...

Acrylic
02-03-2005, 07:07 PM
*ahem*

What do ya'll think of it?

AdventureLover
02-04-2005, 01:52 AM
I liked it.

VampireNaomi
02-04-2005, 05:28 AM
Me too. It's really deep.

neon_git
02-04-2005, 05:32 AM
Oh yes, i thought that some of the metaphysical imagery was particularly effective.

*nods head thoughtfully and pretends to know about poetry*

Acrylic
02-08-2005, 07:03 PM
Thanks all!

I tried not to use direct objects to describe some things (if this makes sense).

I wanted people to get their own image of what this poem meant.