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Tysyacha
03-10-2009, 07:52 PM
(Author's Note: If you find all the mistakes in this badfic and list them in order, you get a prize from Tysyacha--Tysy's Invisible Proofreader Badge! *LOL*)

STAR WARS: KNUCKLES

30 BBY

Darth Vader had a very very special assistant. His name Knuckles. Knuckles was a bounty hunter, which means that he hunted down and tryed to kill the Jedi Knights. Knuckles had a gun and a sword, but he mostly used his fists. That's why people called him Knuckles! Vader sent Knuckles on a mission:

"I want you to get into a TIE fighter and try to find my son, Han Solo."

Knuckles laughed. This would be the easiest mission he'd ever done! Next to Lord Vader stood Admiral Gilad Pellaeon. Gilad was a beautiful young lady, and she winked at Knuckles. Knuckles was happy. He'd find Luke and kill him! He saw a girl, Ensign Thousand, wave to Admiral Pellaeon. Pellaeon waved back.

"Dang!" thought Knuckles. "Thousand's cute. I am going to her ask out."

He stepped up to Ensign Thousand, but Lord Vader was standing close to her. Apparently Vader liked her or something. Knuckles was sad, but he didn't really care. Besides, he had to go on his mission to find and kill the Skywalker.

So he got into his TIE, and Knuckels set off into space. He soon saw the Millenium Falcon up ahead, so he fired a torpedo lazer at it and blew it up. Yay! Score one for the Sith! He still had to locate Luke, however. Where was that Jedi Knight? Now he remembered--Luke had been born on Trandoshan! First off, Knuckles thought he would have to deal with that Wookiee guy from the planet Wroshyr. Chewbacca, his name was. Plus those two droids. R2-D2 used a lot of big words, and C-3PO tweedled and beeped. He'd 86 them both.

So, when he found luke, Luke said, "Who are you?"

Me Knuckles, said Knuckles. "Ty budyesh vtoroi chelovek, kto ya ub'yu!"

"What" said Luke.

"You will be the second man, who I will kill!" Then Luke killed Knuckles dead.

Poor Knuckles. He shoulda known better than to mess with a Sith Lord!!!

Endorenna
03-10-2009, 07:58 PM
:lol: :lol: :lol:

There is no higher praise. :D

We (aka me, myself, and I) want more badfics! :xp:

TriggerGod
03-10-2009, 08:20 PM
you challenged, i accepted the challenge

30 BBY
Vader would be about 11 in this year.

tryed
tried

Han Solo.
Luke Skywalker


"Dang!" thought Knuckles. "Pellaeon's cute. I am going to her ask out."
If that is your intention, there is the fix. Hard to tell since in that paragraph he said he liked Pellaeon but in the next it seems like he likes Thousand...

Knuckels
Knuckles.

Millenium
Millennium

lazer
laser
been born on Trandoshan!
Tatooine
Wookiee guy from the planet Wroshyr.
Kashyyyk
R2-D2 used a lot of big words,
C-3PO
and C-3PO tweedled and beeped.
R2-D2


Me Knuckles, said Knuckles. "Ty budyesh vtoroi chelovek, kto ya ub'yu!"
"I am Knuckles," said Knuckles.



"You will be the second man, who I will kill!"
"You will be the second man that I will have killed!"


Then Luke killed Knuckles dead.
Then Luke killed Knuckles.

Poor Knuckles. He shoulda known better than to mess with a Jedi Knight!!!
fixed

DID I WIN?

Alkonium
03-10-2009, 08:33 PM
I think TriggerGod found all of them, so I'm just going to say that it's as if squirrelking wrote a Star Wars fic, except without bad grammar and spelling.

CommanderQ
03-10-2009, 08:36 PM
HURRAH FOR TRIGGER!!:D

HIGH ON PIE 14
03-10-2009, 08:41 PM
Ahh, beaten to it! Well done TriggerGod. :D



:lol: :lol: :lol:

There is no higher praise. :D


QFE. Hehe, Knuckles...I'm going to chuckle evry time somebody says that now.

~HOP

Tysyacha
03-10-2009, 08:53 PM
There are still some more mistakes you guys haven't found yet, but Trigger...good job! :)

Hint #1: Wookieepedia Gilad Pellaeon. That might clear something up...
Hint #2: Is everything capitalized correctly?
Hint #3: Would anyone under an Admiral's command wave to him so casually? :)
Hint #4: Check the punctuation!
Hint #5: Did Knuckles mix up the word order in one of his pieces of dialogue? :)

Giant Graffiti
03-10-2009, 08:58 PM
Tatooine

Luke was born on Polis Massa.

CommanderQ
03-10-2009, 09:01 PM
OH MY GOSH!! HOW COULD YOU SAY GILAD PELLAEON IS A GIRL!!! NOOOO!!!!:D

He soon saw the Millenium Falcon up ahead, so he fired a torpedo lazer at it and blew it up.

Torpedoes are not lasers, correct?

Tysyacha
03-10-2009, 09:04 PM
Hey, that's a mistake I didn't even know I made! Great job, CommanderQ!

CommanderQ
03-10-2009, 09:48 PM
My pleasure, Tysy!:D

machievelli
03-12-2009, 08:37 PM
Read

Rev7
03-14-2009, 12:38 AM
I sure do love your bad fics Tysy...I really look forward to more!

The_Catto
03-16-2009, 12:39 AM
I was reading this picturing Knuckles as well, Knuckles, but in form of the character from the Sonic: The Hedgehog series. So that just enhanced my laughs at reading this.
Lol, great work, Tysy!

Once again, your badfic is an excellent supply of enjoyment.
10/10!!!