Calling all LOTR fans

[Lost Welshman]

Its not lord of the rings, its not about lord of the rings but check out my story anyway, its the same sort of thing with orcs and elves My Story (http://www.lucasforums.com/showthread.php?s=&threadid=87267) Thank you

[Darth Scythe]

Nice...but kind of warcraft 3ish more then LOTR's, Next time try something diffrent. Your an okay story teller though. Good Work keep it up I'd like to read more.

[Lost Welshman]

You really think its good??? Thanks, If you want i could add chapters 6 and 7 although 7 isnt quite finished yet.

[Rogue15]

use







paragraphs

i read some of it, pretty good stuff.

[Lost Welshman]

Thanks for the help. I think chapter one is ok, a bit corny. I think the introduction of the characters is good on chapter 2 but the rest of it isnt really that good. Beleive me though chapters 5,6 and 7 are the best so far, I just hope people find the fighting parts good. This is the first story I have ever written, it was a spur of the moment thing. Thank you again. and sorry about that other post Rogue.

[vegietto]

i think chapter one is alittle corny too but it is real good

[Lost Welshman]

Does anyone want me too post the next two chapters then?, I appreciate any replys, whether they are compliments or constructive critasism. Also I would like to add I am only 15.

[SettingShadow]

I read the first chapter, to lazy to read the rest :D , but I think its good. Kind of a mix up of, Warcraft, LOTR and Warhammer. Still good job. :)

[Lost Welshman]

WARHAMMER? NOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!! PLEASE TRY to get more people to read it, and then tell me if you want the next two chapters up.

[Tyrion]

Originally posted by Lost Welshman
WARHAMMER? NOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!! PLEASE TRY to get more people to read it, and then tell me if you want the next two chapters up.

That,sir, just drove me from reading it.:p

Kinda ironic...

[Lost Welshman]

Why did it drive you from reading it. I just dont happen to like warhammer, that has nothing to do with the story. All of the other replies I have had have been good or constructive, so why dont you read it?

[Tyrion]

Originally posted by Lost Welshman
Why did it drive you from reading it. I just dont happen to like warhammer, that has nothing to do with the story. All of the other replies I have had have been good or constructive, so why dont you read it?

:p

Rule of life #42:

Never say something that is lacking in your story. Or else your story will lack readers.

:)

[Lost Welshman]

I didnt say anything was lacking, someone suggested that it had a bit of warhammer style to it so i said NOOOOOO! as in no thats impossible noooooooo (luke skywalker) AS IN i dont like warhammer so i was upset that he said that. ANYWAY enough with the chat please can you review the story Thank you.

[Tyrion]

Originally posted by Lost Welshman
I didnt say anything was lacking, someone suggested that it had a bit of warhammer style to it so i said NOOOOOO! as in no thats impossible noooooooo (luke skywalker) AS IN i dont like warhammer so i was upset that he said that. ANYWAY enough with the chat please can you review the story Thank you.

..........

You said it was lacking Warhammer(by that whole messy paragraph).

Thus,you lack a reader.:p

[SettingShadow]

Originally posted by Lost Welshman
I didnt say anything was lacking, someone suggested that it had a bit of warhammer style to it so i said NOOOOOO! as in no thats impossible noooooooo (luke skywalker) AS IN i dont like warhammer so i was upset that he said that. ANYWAY enough with the chat please can you review the story Thank you.

NOOOOOOOOOO :D , plz dont get upset, I dint mean it as an insult at all. The Gremlin and Goblins remind me of Warhammer thats all :) also remind me of Warcraft :p . I didnt at all mean it as an insult. peace :)

[Lost Welshman]

My Chapter 6 and 7 thread has been posted here (http://www.lucasforums.com/showthread.php?s=&threadid=87456) please check it out, even if you havent read the others.

[Darklighter]

Edit - alright, alright, I won't have it moved lol...sorry to worry ya:)

Maybe we'll put it in that forum when everyone has expressed their views on the finished story.

[Lost Welshman]

PLEASE NO!!!!, It'll be forgotten. PLEASE!!!!!

[lightspeed]

It's a good story and I agre paragraphs would definately help since I kept loosing my place:D

[SettingShadow]

I just read the whole story, very nice, I like it :) But its not finnished yet, right? If it were it would be kinda weird end :p

ps. I am beenig honest ;) I like it.

[Lost Welshman]

Very nice, make sure you read chapters 6 and 7, theres a chunk missed in chapter 5 sorry but its not that much.

[SettingShadow]

I´ve read chapter 6 and 7 already ;)

[Jo]

i read your story, very good. but i probably wont read anymore chapters. see for me when i read something(unless it's required) i have to have this certain....uh....click with the story. that click strikes my interest in the story and makes me want to continue reading. i may not read any more of it, but im sure the rest will be just as good as those chapters i read. keep up the great work.

[Lost Welshman]

Thanks for your views, I just thought I would mention that the fact that the paragraphs are all messed up is because I copied and pasted, also I personally think the chapter 6 is the best and chapter 7 reveals part of the main plot, thank you anyway I think ill try and make it more readable.

[SettingShadow]

Oh yea, theres something I dont really like in it (its not my story so you can ignore me on this one ;) ), why have you made the Dwarfs evil? :ball: I love dwarfs. *sob* :(

[Lost Welshman]

It'll be explained later on in the story, dont know why im doing this but just read the spoiler

The Dwarfs end up making a weapon, in the meanwhile they want nothing to do with any other civilisation, they aren't meant to be that evil but towards the end they will have a surprise for everyone.