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Diego Varen 05-25-2006 02:25 PM

[FIN] The Sith Lord
 
This a new Fic I've decided to write. It starts after Jedi Academy, where Jaden decides to take the path of the dark side. I shall post the few Chapter in a few minutes.

Jason Skywalker 05-25-2006 03:08 PM

Cool.I just hope it's as good as JK-DQ.

Niner_777 05-25-2006 03:29 PM

I'm just wondering where you find time to write all of these fics, lol.

Diego Varen 05-25-2006 03:41 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Jason Skywalker
Cool.I just hope it's as good as JK-DQ.

I doubt it. It is the best Fic not in the CEC. I think everyone here should read it. Sabretooth knows what I think of it.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Niner_777
I'm just wondering where you find time to write all of these fics, lol.

I know. :lol:

Anyway here it is.

Diego Varen 05-25-2006 03:41 PM



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Chapter I
Fallen
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Jedi Master, Kyle Katarn slowly walked towards his former apprentice, Jaden Korr. Jaden had fallen to the dark side and he had become more powerful than his former master. He had also become much stronger than Luke Skywalker. Jaden used the Force to pull Marka Ragnos’ scepter to him. Kyle stopped immediately. He quickly held his arm to him, to protect himself from being killed. It didn’t stop Jaden though. Jaden felt his new weapon shoot an orange beam at Kyle. The blast of the scepter blasted Kyle backwards. Jaden then used the scepter to blast a hole in the ceiling, causing several rocks to fall onto Kyle. The rocks landed on Kyle, trapping him. Jaden then used the scepter to blast a hole in the wall to escape. The wall was broken and Jaden leapt through the hole and left to find his X-Wing. Luke walked into the room, seeing the devastation of the battle that Jaden and Kyle had just had. Kyle crawled out of the rocks.
“Kyle what happened here?” Luke asked.
Luke helped Kyle up.
“Jaden has turned to the dark side,” Kyle told Luke, “And he has taken the scepter.”
“And Rosh?” Luke asked.
“Dead,” Kyle told Luke, “Jaden killed him. He felt betrayed by Rosh and the anger was too strong for him to control.”
Luke held his head in shame. He felt like he could cry. Kyle felt the same.
“I… misjudged him,” Luke told Kyle, “I’m sorry Kyle.”
“I failed both my students Luke,” Kyle told Luke, “Maybe I shouldn’t be teaching at the Academy. It’s not like I’ve been the perfect Jedi myself.”
“No Kyle,” Luke interrupted, “Yoda and Ben were both great teachers, yet even they lost students.”
Luke then closed his eyes for a minute. He was thinking of Jaden. He opened his eyes.
“I can still sense good in him,” Luke told Kyle, “There’s always hope Kyle. Remember that.”
“You maybe right,” Kyle said, “Well at least Tavion and her cult have been stopped, Ragnos won’t be coming back.
“But the scepter is too powerful.” Luke told Kyle, “We must find Jaden and destroy it.”
“I’ll take care of it,” Kyle told Luke, “As my student, Jaden is my responsibility. If I find Jaden, I’ll let you know.”
Kyle was walking out of the tomb, when Luke called out to him.
“Be careful,” Luke told Kyle, “If there is anything I can do to help.”
“I will.” Kyle interrupted.
“And may the Force be with you.” Luke told Kyle.

Jaden found his X-Wing and left Korriban. The Jedi Order was now in tatters and the New Republic would soon be the same. Jaden approached the Star Destroyer where he had killed his best friend, Rosh Penin. As he landed inside, he arrived on the top floor. Several Imperial officers were working in the bridge of the Star Destroyer. As the door opened, the Imperial officers turned to see Jaden. The head officer walked towards Jaden. He had an angry look on his face.
“Who the hell are you?” He asked, “You can’t expect to…”
Jaden stopped him, by using the Force to choke the man. He grabbed onto the collar of his neck, trying to breathe.
“Please… let me go.” The man choked.
“As you wish.” Jaden told the man.
He pressed the button on his Lightsaber. An orange blade appeared. He pushed his Lightsaber into the man’s abdomen. The man yelled in pain. As he yelled, the man’s face turned red and his body bled to death. Jaden smiled coldly. He pulled his Lightsaber out of the man and let the man collapse.
“If anyone else wants to end up like his man here, you can try to kill me now. Go on!” Jaden shouted at the other officers.
None of the other officers said a word. They didn’t even breathe.
“Good,” Jaden told them, “Now set a course for Dxun. There is something I must do.”

Kyle set his ship, the Raven’s Claw for autopilot to Coruscant. He put his hand on his face. He felt as if nobody could ever look at him again. He had failed. He had failed Rosh. He had failed the Academy. But most of all. Most of all he had failed Jaden. How could he not know that Jaden could fall to the dark side so easily? Had Kyle’s teachings failed Jaden? Had the fact that Rosh had once felt the dark side, made Jaden also feel the dark side? There was no answer to any of those questions. They would be answered soon enough.

The Star Destroyer came out of hyperspace. While the officers set their coordinates for Dxun, Jaden hung his head. He was thinking about the previous events that had happened. To Jaden, it had all flown by. One minute he had killed his best friend and then the next, he was on a Star Destroyer on its way to Dxun. Maybe Jaden was never meant to be a Jedi. Maybe he should never had built his first Lightsaber on Coruscant and travel to Yavin IV. His mind was questioning itself all the time. Jaden knew he couldn’t undo all the damage now. He decided to swear his allegiance to the dark side. He had fallen. Now his goals in life were to destroy the Jedi and the New Republic. An officer walked towards Jaden.
“Sir we are approaching Dxun.” He told Jaden.
“Excellent officer,” Jaden muttered, “But I want you to address me as my lord. Do you understand?”
“Yes… my lord.” He told Jaden.
“Excellent,” Jaden told the officer, “You are dismissed.”
“Thank you.” The officer said.
Dxun was in site.
“Prepare a shuttle to take me down to Dxun, officer.” Jaden told the officer.
“As you wish my lord.” The officer said finally.

Kyle landed on Coruscant. He got out and saw his former partner and lover, Jan Ors run out towards him. She greeted Kyle with wide-open arms. Kyle received the hug and they kissed each other on the cheek.
“What are you doing here?” Jan asked.
“I have bad news Jan,” Kyle told Jan, “Jaden has fallen to the dark side.”
“What?” Jan asked, “Why?”
“That’s what I’m asking myself all the time.” Kyle told Jan.
He thought it was best not to tell Jan about how he fell. Kyle walked back to the Raven’s Claw and waved to Jan. He was about to take off, when Jan stopped him.
“I want to come with you.” She told Kyle.
“I can’t let you come.” Kyle told her, remembering the time when he believed she had been killed.
“I know you’re trying to look after me, but tough, I’m coming,” Jan told Kyle, getting into the Raven’s Claw, “I’m here to help you, protect you.”
“I suppose there’s no way to change your mind,” Kyle said finally, sighing out loud, “Okay then.”
Kyle and Jan strapped themselves in and then left Coruscant.
“Where do you think Jaden will be?” Jan asked.
“I don’t know,” Kyle told Jan, “But we’ll find him. Whether I have to go to the end of the Galaxy or not.”

Jaden landed the shuttle on Dxun’s surface. He had landed, right next to the tomb. He tried to open the tomb. It was locked. Suddenly, a spirit arrived in front of Jaden.
“Why do you disturb me?” The spirit asked, groaning.
“I command you to open this tomb, spirit, otherwise I shall make your living death a lot worse.” Jaden told the spirit.
“I am no spirit!” The spirit shouted, “I am the Force ghost of the legendary Sith Lord, Freedon Nadd. I’m sure you have heard of me?”
“I don’t think so, spirit,” Jaden told him, “Now let me in!”
“Never!” Nadd shouted, “Only if you can become a true Sith, you can access my power.”
“Fine.” Jaden sighed, “I’ll be back.”
He walked off, back to his shuttle.

Stay tuned for Chapter II Dreams or Visions?

Niner_777 05-25-2006 03:47 PM

Me like.

Diego Varen 05-25-2006 03:49 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Niner_777
Me like.

Thanks Niner_777. When will you post the next Chapter of Amongst The Ruins? That is one of my favourite levels on Battlefront II. It might be because it it easy. :lol:

Niner_777 05-25-2006 03:57 PM

He, he. I'm working on it right now. *logs out and starts writing next chapter*

RC-1162 05-25-2006 04:17 PM

good job, Pottsie. glad youre not...well...forget that.
just one thing, if Jaden really fell, then his ego would have controoled him. how many people below vader have called him "anakin" or "vader" just like that? just an FYI. itd be better if you changed what jaden said to "call me my lord"

Diego Varen 05-25-2006 04:19 PM

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Originally Posted by RC 1162
good job, Pottsie. glad youre not...well...forget that.
just one thing, if Jaden really fell, then his ego would have controoled him. how many people below vader have called him "anakin" or "vader" just like that? just an FYI. itd be better if you changed what jaden said to "call me my lord"

Will do RC. Thanks for the advice. And yeah, we'll forget about that thing. Nobody ask about it. Anyway, I'll check out your next Chapter of Galactic Conquest.

Diego Varen 05-25-2006 04:56 PM

A bit shorter than my first Chapter, but still good. Kyle and Jan won't be back in it until Chapter IV.

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Chapter II
Dreams or Visions?
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Returning to the Star Destroyer, which Jaden now named the Echo, he assumed the captain’s dormitory as his own. He entered his new dormitory. It was quite large. It had several lockers, a large round table and a bed. He took off his tattered old Jedi robes that he wore and put them in one of the lockers. He got into bed and drifted off to sleep.

Jaden felt himself drift over a cold, icy Planet. Was it Hoth? Mygeeto? Or was it the polar regions of Telos? To Jaden, those icy Planets looked the same. He felt himself drift onto a high mountain. He felt himself drop onto the hard, cold floor. Ouch! He thought. He got up. The snowstorm blinded his sight. Suddenly, the snowstorm stopped around Jaden. He looked up to see an old woman next to him. She was a Force ghost, like Freedon Nadd was. She wore an old, black Jedi robe, which hid her face.
“What are you doing here?” She asked.
“How the hell am I supposed to know?” Jaden asked angrily.
“You must be cold, with only your underwear on.” The old woman told Jaden.
“Well I am dreaming aren’t I, you old bat!” Jaden shouted at her, “What do you want anyway?”
“That is why I have brought you here,” The old woman told Jaden, “You have fallen to the dark side, as I had once. If you choose to follow that path, then I can help you.”
“Look I don’t take advice from some broken old woman.” Jaden told the old woman angrily.
“My name is Kreia, I am over four thousand years old.” She told Jaden.
“This gets even better,” Jaden told her, his anger rising, “I especially don’t need help from a four thousand year old woman.”
“I believe you shall become a Sith,” Kreia told Jaden, “But first, I can only set you off on the journey you are about to face. You will need a new identity, new robes and an apprentice.”
Jaden noticed her, pick up some black robes. She gave them to Jaden, who snatched them off her.
“This robe once belonged to the dark lord, Revan, who was once my apprentice,” Kreia told Jaden.
Jaden put on his new robe. It felt really smooth and comfortable, considering it was over four thousand years old. Kreia then picked up an old, dusty Vibroblade.
“Kneel.” She told Jaden.
“This better be worth my time you old bat!” Jaden shouted.
“Kneel!” Kreia shouted.
Jaden kneeled on the ground. Kreia then placed the Vibroblade onto Jaden’s right shoulder.
“You shall be now known as Darth Malus.” She told Jaden, placing the Vibroblade on Jaden’s other shoulder.
“Thank you… old woman,” Malus muttered, “Now send me back.”
“As you wish.” Kreia told Malus.
She shot a large bolt of lightning out of her hands at Malus. Malus felt himself leave the Planet.


Malus felt himself wake up in his bed. He noticed that it was the next day. He was wearing his new robe. He got up and walked over to his locker. He took out his Lightsaber and placed it in his belt. The door opened and the officer walked in.
“Are you alright my lord?” He asked.
“I have a new name officer,” Malus told the officer, “Soon I shall be known as Darth Malus across the Galaxy. You shall still call me my lord or Malus. Your choice.”
“As you wish my lord,” The officer said, “By the way my name is Officer Starkiller.”
“I don’t care what your name is, just get back to work!” Malus told Officer Starkiller, “I want to return to Korriban. There is something I must do there.”
“As you wish my lord.” Officer Starkiller told Malus.
He walked out, while Jaden sat down to meditate on the cold floor.

Stay tuned for Chapter III The Sith Tomb

PS: Malus is Latin for evil.

Jason Skywalker 05-25-2006 06:47 PM

Good,good.Fall even deeper onto the Dark Side!Now really,good.Altough a bit short.

The_Catto 05-26-2006 02:28 AM

i like, surprising to see Kreia though lol, but good all the same .. now what fic is this one hmmm? lol, 11th? 12th? haha
(Perhaps there was an exxageration on that last part)

Diego Varen 05-26-2006 02:38 AM

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Originally Posted by Mr_BFA
i like, surprising to see Kreia though lol, but good all the same .. now what fic is this one hmmm? lol, 11th? 12th? haha
(Perhaps there was an exxageration on that last part)

I don't know :lol:. Anyway, I don't care about how many bad Fics I have wrote. Kreia won't be a main Character in my Fic, she will just be in this Chapter and the next. I mean in Sabretooth's, Exar Kun was Jaden's guide. Anyway, thanks for reading. I'll check out The Second Coming Of Evil, next time you update.

Diego Varen 05-26-2006 02:46 AM

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Chapter III
The Sith Tomb
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Malus took his shuttle to the surface of Korriban. The last time he was here, he was fighting his ex master, Kyle. Now that he was dead, the only Jedi left was Luke. Officer Starkiller came out of Malus’ shuttle and walked up to him.
“Is everything alright my lord?” He asked.
“It… it is of no concern,” Malus told him, “I must go to Ludo Kresh’s tomb. I have been told to go.”
“Right away my lord,” Officer Starkiller told Malus, “I’ll be waiting on the shuttle, waiting for your return.”
Malus walked off, pulling his hood up, which covered his face. He entered the old Shyrack caves. It had a strong stench of death. Malus got out his orange Lightsaber and cut through several rocks. After clearing through, he eventually found Ludo Kresh’s tomb. Malus opened the large tomb door easily. At least I can enter this tomb, He thought angrily. As soon as he entered the tomb, the door shut behind him. Malus felt cold. Then again, the power of the dark side was cold. Only some people could control its power. Like Malus. Malus continued to walk down the thin corridor, until he entered a large room. Luke stood there.
“Jaden, I hate to admit it, but you’ve truly fallen.” Luke told him.
“I’m no longer Jaden!” Malus shouted, “I’m Darth Malus! Lord of the Sith!”
Luke reached for his Lightsaber. A green blade came out.
“So be it.” Luke said.
Malus ran towards Luke and fought him. Luke was strong, but Malus was even stronger. Especially with the power of the dark side. Their Lightsabers clashed together, causing orange and green sparks bouncing off their blades. Malus’ anger raised, causing him to push Luke backwards angrily. Malus tried to stab Luke, but he rolled over to the side. Malus put his Lightsaber and away and let Luke run towards him. As soon as Luke was close enough, Malus shot a large bolt of lightning at Luke. Luke fell the ground, shouting out in pain. Malus continued to hurt him and his power increased as Luke shouted. Eventually Luke stopped shouting. He should have died, but instead he disappeared. As soon as he disappeared, Malus heard several people running behind him. They were New Republic Troopers. Their Blaster Rifles were raised at Malus.
“What happened to Master Skywalker?” One of them asked.
“You’ll find out soon enough.” Malus told the Trooper.
He gripped the Trooper. He tried to loosen his collar to breathe, but he was killed. The other Troopers walked backwards. Fear. Malus didn’t care for cowards. They had to die. The Troopers tried to run off, but Malus shot a large bolt of lightning at them. Like Luke they disappeared. What was this tomb? Malus thought angrily, There was something strange about it. Nobody died in this tomb. A shame, he thought. It was time to leave, until he heard a voice behind.
“You’re not going anywhere.” A voice groaned.
“And what makes you think you can stop me?” Malus asked.
“Because I was once your best friend.” The voice groaned.
Rosh? Rosh Penin? Now this was strange. Malus turned round.
“I killed you once Rosh,” Malus told Rosh, “I can kill you again.”
Malus leapt up high in the air and landed behind Rosh. Rosh immediately looked behind him, but Jaden stabbed him.
“You were just as weak as before!” Malus shouted at Rosh.
He took his Lightsaber out of Rosh and they continued to stare at each other. Rosh groaned out loud as he disappeared. It was over. Malus prepared to leave. Hopefully forever.
“How was the test?” Kreia’s voice echoed in Malus’ head.
“Test?” Malus asked, his voice rising, “Test! What are doing in my head?”
“I can enter your thoughts whenever I please.” Kreia told Malus.
“Don’t bother in the future old woman!” Malus shouted.
Kreia didn’t reply. That showed her, Malus thought. He left the tomb.

As soon as Malus came out of the cave, Officer Starkiller ran up to him.
“Are you alright my lord?” He asked.
“That tomb has changed me Officer,” Malus told him, “But no matter, we should leave.”
“Where to?” Officer Starkiller asked.
“I’ll think about it.” Malus told him.
Malus walked into his shuttle, with Officer Starkiller following him.

Several hours later, Malus was meditating in his dormitory. He was thinking about everything that had happened. His power was increasing and soon he would rule the Galaxy. The door opened.
“What do you want Officer?” He asked.
“I’m not your Officer,” A man said, “I’m here for a very important reason.”
Malus got up and turned to see a Kel Dor.
“Who are you?” Malus asked.
“My name is Darth Caos.” He told Malus, “I swear my allegiance to you.”
Caos bent on his knee, bowing to Malus. Malus felt great. Now he was being followed.
“Excellent,” Malus said finally, “You shall be my first apprentice. Darth Caos.”
Caos got up off the floor.

Stay tuned for Chapter IV The search for Jaden

Jason Skywalker 05-26-2006 04:13 AM

Hmm,Kel Dor.You took that idea from me.Just kidding,and it's good,they are just shorter than usual.

The_Catto 05-26-2006 08:08 AM

another nice chapter .. i like how theyre are not small chapters, but not long ones either ... it can get annoying how there can be the extremely 15 minute chapters to read lol, keep the good work up :D

Niner_777 05-26-2006 08:47 AM

I just finished reading chapters two and three. I'm not much of a critic, but I can tell you that they were good. However, it seemed like everything happened really fast. I don't know if you meant it to be like that or not.

Btw, I just posted chapter three of Amongst the Ruins. I know this is Pottsie's fic, but check it out. :)

Diego Varen 05-26-2006 12:36 PM

Niner_777: Sorry about that thing happening so fast. I've checked out Amongst the Ruins and like you, I also tell people to check out my Fics.

Jason Skywalker: Yeah I did. I couldn't decide between a Kel Dor or a Twi'lek. So I chose Kel Dor.

Mr_BFA: I have to agree with you about length of some Chapters. Some seem to take forever to read. What does BFA stand for anyway?

Thanks for all your comments, Chapter IV coming soon. Hopefully a lot longer as well.

JediMaster12 05-26-2006 03:26 PM

I have to agree with Niner. It was a little fast. I suggest slowly down and somehow organize a more gentler means of transition from one plot to the next. It's easier on the mind. It's looking good though and I hope you are able to finish this one :D

Diego Varen 05-26-2006 03:35 PM

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Originally Posted by JediMaster12
I hope you are able to finish this one :D

I agree with that. Chapter IV I'm currently writing and will include a cameo from a certain Star Wars Original Trilogy Character that hasn't been in either Jedi Outcast or Jedi Academy.

Niner_777 05-26-2006 06:07 PM

Quote:

Sorry about that thing happening so fast.
No problem.

Jason Skywalker 05-26-2006 06:33 PM

It's Vader,isn't it?No,wait,The Emperor!

Diego Varen 05-27-2006 06:16 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Jason Skywalker
It's Vader,isn't it?No,wait,The Emperor!

No. It is someone who was played by:

spoiler:
Harrison Ford

Diego Varen 05-27-2006 06:29 AM

While you are waiting for Chapter IV, here are the bios of the Characters you've seen so far. I may post bios.

Name: Darth Malus (Jaden Korr)
Species: Human
Eye Colour: Blue
Hair Colour: Brown
Class: Sith Lord
Favourite Weapon(s): Lightsaber
Lightsaber Colour(s): Orange then Red
Favourite Ship(s): The Raven’s Claw/The Echo/X-Wing/Tie Fighter
Favourite Force Power(s): Battle Meditation/Force Lightning/Force Grip
Master(s): Kyle Katarn
Apprentice(s): Darth Caos
Homeworld: Coruscant
Political Affiliation: Sith/Imperial Remnant
Allies: Sith/Imperial Remnant
Enemies: New Republic/Jedi Order

Name: Kyle Katarn
Species: Human
Eye Colour: Brown
Hair Colour: Brown with slight shades of grey
Class: Jedi Guardian
Favourite Weapon(s): Lightsaber
Lightsaber Colour(s): Blue
Favourite Ship(s): The Raven’s Claw
Favourite Force Power(s): Force Protect
Master(s): Luke Skywalker
Apprentice(s): Jaden Korr/Rosh Penin
Homeworld: Sulon
Political Affiliation: Jedi Order
Allies: New Republic/Jedi Order
Enemies: Imperial Remnant/Sith

Name: Jan Ors
Species: Human
Eye Colour: Brown
Hair Colour: Brown
Class: Scout
Favourite Weapon(s): E-11 Blaster Rifle
Favourite Ship(s): The Raven’s Claw
Homeworld: Alderaan
Political Affiliation: New Republic
Allies: New Republic/Jedi Order
Enemies: Imperial Remnant/Sith

Name: Darth Caos
Species: Kel Dor
Eye Colour: Black
Hair Colour: None
Class: Sith Marauder
Favourite Weapon(s): Dual Lightsabers
Lightsaber Colour(s): Red
Favourite Ship(s): The Echo
Favourite Force Power(s): Force Rage
Master(s): Darth Malus
Apprentice(s): None
Homeworld: Kril’dor
Political Affiliation: Sith/Imperial Remnant
Allies: Sith/Imperial Remnant
Enemies: New Republic/Jedi Order

Name: Officer Starkiller
Species: Human
Eye Colour: Hazel
Hair Colour: Grey
Class: Officer
Favourite Weapon(s): Imperial Heavy Repeater
Favourite Ship(s): The Echo
Homeworld: Tatooine
Political Affiliation: Imperial Remnant
Allies: Imperial Remnant/Sith
Enemies: New Republic/Jedi Order

Name: Luke Skywalker
Species: Human
Eye Colour: Blue
Hair Colour: Blonde
Class: Jedi Master
Favourite Weapon(s): Lightsaber
Lightsaber Colour(s): Green
Favourite Ship(s): X-Wing
Favourite Force Power(s): Force Heal
Master(s): Ben “Obi-Wan” Kenobi/Yoda
Apprentice(s): Many Students including Kyle Katarn
Homeworld: Born on Polis Massa/Raised on Tatooine
Political Affiliation: Jedi Order
Allies: New Republic/Jedi Order
Enemies: Imperial Remnant/Sith

Diego Varen 05-27-2006 07:45 AM

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Chapter IV
The search for Jaden
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“Where are we going?” Jan asked.
“Correlia,” Kyle told her, “Perhaps Han can help me.”
The Raven’s Claw landed in the busy city of Cornet. Many people were about on Cornet. Humans, Rodians, Twi’leks, Bith, Kel Dor and Zabraks were one of the many species that came to the Cornet. Now where is Han? Kyle thought, He last told me that if I need to see him, he would be on Correlia. Kyle decided that he should go to the local cantina. Perhaps Han would be there. Kyle and Jan were about to enter when an Aqualish bouncer stopped them.
“You come in here, as long as you don’t cause any trouble.”
“We won’t cause any trouble and we can enter” Kyle said, waving his hand at the Aqualish.
“You won’t cause any trouble and you can enter.” The bouncer told them.
Kyle and Jan entered the cantina.
“What did you do?” Jan asked.
“Let’s just say I’ve influenced him.” Kyle told Jan.
The cantina looked great. Several Bith musicians played their instruments and local Podraces could be watched on the loud view screen. Those were just some of the things that could entertain people.
“You go get a table, while I get some drinks,” Kyle told Jan, “What do you want?”
“Correlian Ale please.” Jan told Kyle.
“Okay then,” Kyle told Jan, “I’ll be back soon.”
Kyle went over to the counter. There was nobody at the counter. A Chiss bartender came over to Kyle.
“What can I get for you sir?” He asked, noticing Kyle’s Lightsaber in his belt.
“A Correlian Ale and a Juma Juice.” Kyle told him.
“Of course Jedi sirs.” The Chiss bartender told Kyle.
“In clean glasses please.” Kyle added.
The bartender put his current dirty glasses down and got out two clean ones. He put his glasses to warm up under the boiler.
“It will be about two minutes,” The bartender told Kyle, “Do you seek informations?”
“I do,” Kyle told the bartender, “Have you seen a young man, who carried a Lightsaber and a large scepter?”
“I’m sorry sir, but I haven’t seen any men of what you speak.” The bartender told Kyle.
Both Kyle and the bartender heard a beep. The drinks were ready. The bartender got the drinks and gave them to Kyle.
“Thanks.” Kyle told the bartender, handing him twenty-five Credits.
Kyle took his drinks and returned to the table. He gave Jan her Correlian Ale and Kyle sat down.

Han Solo approached the local cantina. It was busy as always. He was about to enter the cantina, when the bouncer stopped him.
“You come in here, as long as you don’t cause any trouble.”
“Okay okay.” Han told the bouncer.
He entered the cantina. Definitely busy, Han thought.

Kyle took both his and Jan’s glasses away. He returned them to the counter and when he turned around, he noticed Han entering the cantina. He walked up to Han.
“Hey Han, you alright?” Kyle asked.
“Couldn’t be better Kyle,” Han told him, “What are you doing here anyway?”
“I was looking for… information.” Kyle told Han.
“Information on what?” Han asked.
“Come to my table,” Kyle told him, “We can talk more there.”
Kyle led Han to his and Jan’s table. Kyle sat down.
“Well hello Jan,” Han said, “Are you alright?”
“Yeah.” Jan told him.
“Listen Han, we need your help,” Kyle told Han, “Sit down and we’ll explain everything.”

Malus started to train his new apprentice. Caos was strong with his two Lightsabers, but lacked in power and speed. How could he be of any use to Malus? It was no matter. Many Sith in the past were always weak in some part of their training. Malus sent out a group of formidable Droids to attack his apprentice. Caos ignited his two red Lightsabers and waited for the Droids to attack. Soon, they all started to attack. Caos got into a rage and started to attack the Droids.
“Good, good, let the hate flow through you.” Malus told his new Apprentice.
One of the Droids shot at Caos’ shoulder. He yelled out loud and started to destroy the Droid. His anger raised and he ran to destroy the other Droids. The Droids had no chance against him. The Droids were killed in a minute. The Droids fell to the ground. Caos smiled and he put his Lightsabers away.
“Excellent my young apprentice,” Malus told Caos, “Training is over for now.”
Malus and Caos left the training room.

Kyle, Jan and Han left the cantina. Han had told them in the cantina, that he decided not to go with Kyle and Jan, but promised them that if he heard anything of or about Jaden, then he would tell them straight away. Kyle and Jan returned to the Raven’s Claw. They got in and left Cornet. As soon as they left, Jan asked Kyle a question.
“If Jaden has fallen to the dark side, how come he isn’t looking for you?”
“He believes me to be dead.” Kyle told Jan.
“Oh.” Jan said.
“This may prove to be an advantage to us.” Kyle added.
“So where do we go now?” Jan asked.
“Coruscant,” Kyle told Jan, “We must find Jaden’s parents and tell them the bad news.”

Malus entered the bridge of the Echo. His apprentice was by his side. Officer Starkiller greeted them.
“Lord Malus, a group of Stormtroopers have called us asking for your help.” Officer Starkiller told them.
“Leave the fools to their fate,” Malus told him, “Where are these Stormtroopers?”
“Tatooine my lord,” Officer Starkiller told him, “A small squadron of New Republic troopers are attacking them. I suggest you should help them.”
“I grow tired of you Officer,” Malus told Officer Starkiller, “If it will make you feel any happier I’ll go.”
“They will appreciate that my lord.” Officer Starkiller told him.
“Master, can I come?” Caos asked eagerly.
“No, you stay here and complete your training.” Malus told him.
“Yes my lord.” Caos said.
Caos left for the training room and Malus prepared to take his shuttle to Tatooine.

The Raven’s Claw landed on Coruscant. Kyle and Jan got out. Coruscant was as peaceful as ever. A Droid walked up to them.
“Welcome to Coruscant, can I help you both?”
“Yes, can you tell me where the Korr family live?” Kyle asked.
“One moment please,” The Droid told Kyle, “Scanning. Scanning. I’m sorry sir, but the Korr family left a short while ago.”
Kyle sighed.
“Do you know where they are now?” He asked.
“I believe they decided to live on Naboo in the city of Theed.” The Droid told Kyle.
“Thank you.” Kyle told the Droid.
Kyle and Jan returned to the Raven’s Claw.
“Let’s go.” Kyle told Jan.
The Raven’s Claw left Coruscant and was on its way to Naboo.

Stay tuned for Chapter V Stormtrooper’s Revolt

Jason Skywalker 05-27-2006 10:43 AM

Good chapter.I'm guessing the Stormtroopers are lying since you posted the chapter's name.

Diego Varen 05-27-2006 10:46 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Jason Skywalker
Good chapter.I'm guessing the Stormtroopers are lying since you posted the chapter's name.

Possibly. You'll have to wait and see. I'm starting to write that Chapter now.

Niner_777 05-27-2006 10:59 AM

That was a good chapter. I liked how you slowed down a little in the cantina and put in some dialogue. Also, I liked the description of the cantina. I could picture it in my head. Great job.

Diego Varen 05-27-2006 11:01 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Niner_777
That was a good chapter. I liked how you slowed down a little in the cantina and put in some dialogue. Also, I liked the description of the cantina. I could picture it in my head. Great job.

Thanks. I always imagined the cantina to be similar to the one from Jedi Outcast on Nar Shaddaa.

Diego Varen 05-27-2006 12:51 PM

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Chapter IV
Stormtrooper’s Revolt
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The shuttle landed on Tatooine. Malus got out of his shuttle and got a message on his comlink. It was from the leader of the Stormtroopers.
“Lord Malus, the New Republic are coming in too fast. You must help us. We are near the Sarlacc in the Dune Sea.”
“Just don’t die on me.” Malus told the leader angrily.
“We won’t my lord.” The leader told Malus.
Malus turned his comlink off and returned to his shuttle. Inside was a speeder bike. He got on the speeder bike and sped off to the Dune Sea.

A mysterious man watched the Stormtroopers planning to wait for their leader, Malus. What were they doing? The man thought, Stormtroopers weren’t the type of Troops who would wait for their leader. However the man knew this was strange. He decided to wait for Malus to arrive and see what would happen next.

Malus’ Speeder Bike started to slow down. It had run out of fuel. Blast! Malus thought angrily, This has been a dangerous waste of time. He also had to stop in the worst part of Tatooine. Tusken Raider territory. He heard a Tusken Raider call behind him. Malus ignited his orange Lightsaber and attacked the Tusken Raider. There were more Tusken Raiders. They all got out their Gaffi Sticks and tried to attack Malus. Malus gripped one of the Tusken Raiders and threw him onto the others. They all fell over. Malus threw his Lightsaber at two of the other Tusken Raiders. There were five more Tusken Raiders remaining. The five remaining Tusken Raiders tried to surround Malus, however Malus leapt out and killed a Tusken Raider. Four more left. The remaining four Tusken Raiders got out their Rifles and tried to shoot at Malus. Malus blocked all the shots and stabbed one of the Tusken Raiders. Three more left. Two of the Tusken Raiders tried to run away, but Malus threw his Lightsaber and the Tusken Raiders. One more left. Malus gripped the remaining Tusken Raider and waited until he died. Malus had no time to lose. He sped off into the distance, hoping he could still save the Stormtroopers.

The mysterious man could overhear the Stormtrooper’s plan. It didn’t sound good. The man thought it would be best to assassinate the leader of the group. The man got out his Sniper Rifle and he prepared to fire. He was about to fire, when he heard a Tusken Raider. The man quickly threw his Sniper Rifle away and grabbed his Lightsaber. A red blade ignited from the Lightsaber. The man quickly blocked the Gaffi Stick and stabbed the Tusken Raider. Several more Tusken Raiders closed in on the man. He knew that Tusken Raider territory was dangerous.

“Sir, Lord Malus is approaching.” A Stormtrooper shouted.
“Excellent,” The leader of the Stormtroopers said, “Reload your weapons. This assassination shall be short and quick.”

Malus approached the small group of Stormtroopers. There were two groups aboard two Desert Skiffs right above the Sarlacc. The leader of the Stormtroopers noticed Malus approaching.
“Ah Lord Malus, please come aboard.”
“Where are the New Republic Troops?” Malus asked.
“You fool!” The leader shouted, “There are no New Republic Troops.”
“What?” Malus asked, his anger rising.
“We have business we need to discuss.” The leader told Malus.
“What business?” Malus asked angrily.
As Malus and the leader spoke, a Stormtrooper slowly approached Malus. Malus could feel the Stormtrooper’s presence behind him and Malus immediately ignited his Lightsaber. As he did, it killed the Stormtrooper.
“Attack!” The leader shouted.
The Stormtroopers shot at Malus. Malus nearly fell off the edge, but he leapt backwards onto the other Desert Skiff. The Stormtroopers there weren’t expecting it and Malus killed them all. Malus leapt back to the other Desert Skiff and killed all the Stormtroopers there, except the leader.
“Send more reinforcements!” The leader shouted into his comlink.
As soon as the leader had shouted that, a large army of Stormtroopers approached Malus. Malus felt really angry now.
“Why have you done this to me?” He asked angrily.
“We don’t like your leadership Malus.” The leader told Malus.
Before Malus decided to kill the leader, he asked him one final question.
“Is all the Imperial Remnant against me?”
“No, just us.” The leader told Malus.
Malus gripped the leader and threw him into the Sarlacc. Just as Malus watched him being digested into the Sarlacc, a Stormtrooper fired a rocket from his Merr-Sonn PLX-2M Portable Missile System at the Desert Skiff. Malus leapt onto the other Desert Skiff. Another Stormtrooper from behind fired a rocket from his Merr-Sonn PLX-2M Portable Missile System. Malus leapt backwards onto the ground. The Stormtroopers closed in onto Malus. Malus raised his Lightsaber high, preparing to attack. The Stormtroopers fired at Malus. Malus shot a large bolt of lightning at the Stormtroopers, killing a fifth of their entire army. The Stormtroopers continued to fire at Malus.

Meanwhile, the mysterious man killed all the Tusken Raiders above. He turned off his Lightsaber and turned around. He noticed Malus being attacked down below. It was time to help him. The man was about to go down, when a large group of Stormtroopers stopped him.

Malus blocked all the Stormtrooper’s shots, killing them in the process. The only way he could stay alive was by forcing himself into a rage, causing him to be invincible to incoming shots. He was near the Sarlacc. Suddenly, one of the Stormtroopers shot at Malus’ hand. Malus dropped his Lightsaber and it fell into the Sarlacc. That was the second Lightsaber he had lost. He had no more weapons left. The only weapon he could use now was his scepter. Malus shot his scepter at a large group of Stormtroopers, killing another fifth of the army. Malus was losing power fast and his scepter was running out of power. A Stormtrooper shot at Malus and he dropped his scepter, which disappeared like that time in the Sith Tomb. This was Malus’ moment of weakness. He should have killed the Stormtroopers by now. They were too strong for Malus though. Everyone in the Stormtrooper’s army raised their Blaster Rifles. They were about to shoot, when a mysterious man leapt into the middle and pushed his Lightsaber into the ground. It caused a mild earthquake, killing all the Stormtrooper’s. The man wore crimson robes. He had a weird shaped head, for a Human and he had dark black eyebrows and dark brown eyes.
“Who are you?” Malus asked.
“I’m RedHawke,” The man told Malus, “I was once a spy for Desann and his apprentice, Tavion.”
“If I had a Lightsaber right now, I would kill you!” Malus shouted at RedHawke.
RedHawke handed him a red Lightsaber.
“Go ahead,” RedHawke told Malus, “If it would help you.”
Malus decided not to.
“You may be of some use to me,” Malus told RedHawke.
“That is why I’m here Lord Malus.” RedHawke told Malus.
“How do you know my name?” Malus asked RedHawke.
“I know many things Malus,” RedHawke told Malus, “As a spy and Shadow Lord of the Sith, I do know many things. I want to become your humble servant.”
Malus thought for a moment. There was something strange about this RedHawke. He seemed just as powerful as Malus. It was no matter. Malus thought that he could be useful.
“Come with me,” Malus told RedHawke, “We must return to my shuttle.”
“I’ve a Speeder Bike to get us there,” RedHawke told Malus, “Follow me.”
RedHawke led Malus to his Speeder Bike on top of a cliff. Both Malus and RedHawke got on and sped off into the distance.

Stay tuned for Chapter V The Korr Family

Diego Varen 05-27-2006 12:54 PM

RedHawke (Shadow Lord of the Sith™) is in tribute of our Moderator of the KOTOR Forum.

Niner_777 05-27-2006 01:02 PM

Cool. There could have been more detail in the destroying of the stormtrooper army. You know how you want it though. :)

Seeing your success makes me think that I should work on mine, lol.

Diego Varen 05-27-2006 01:06 PM

Influence Gained: Niner_777.

Thanks for the quick reply. If I can be bothered, I may edit that Chapter and add more detail like you said. Personally, I thought that Chapter is my best Chapter I've wrote for this Fic so far.

Jason Skywalker 05-27-2006 01:06 PM

Good chapter.I like the way you are putting RedHawke in it.

Diego Varen 05-27-2006 01:08 PM

Influence Gained: Jason Skywalker.

RedHawke was just an idea of mine. He is supposed to be as powerful as Malus, but will he kill Malus for Lord of the Sith? We'll find out. I wonder if RedHawke notices he's in a Fic. If not, maybe I'll have to PM him and tell him or see if one of the other Mods notice.

Jason Skywalker 05-27-2006 01:16 PM

Yep,you're influencing me.Short time,and i'm a Jedi Guardian,lol.

Diego Varen 05-27-2006 01:19 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Jason Skywalker
Yep,you're influencing me.Short time,and i'm a Jedi Guardian,lol.

I'm always a Jedi Consular. They're the best to me (In my opinion). The best combinations for me are Scout/Jedi Consular for KOTOR and Jedi Consular/Jedi Master for TSL.

Diego Varen 05-27-2006 05:02 PM

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Chapter VI
The Korr Family
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The Raven’s Claw landed in a spaceport near the busy city of Theed on Naboo. It was still a beautiful city, considering it’s rule under the Galactic Empire several years before. Kyle and Jan got out of the Raven’s Claw.
“Where do you think the Korrs live?” Jan asked.
Kyle looked around. Where would you find a small family in Theed?
“I don’t know,” He told Jan, “Perhaps we could go to the palace and talk to the local King and Queen. They may know.”
Lucky for Kyle and Jan, they had landed in a spaceport near the palace. Kyle and Jan left the spaceport and entered the main city of Theed. The palace was to the left of them. They noticed two New Republic guards guarding the door.
“Do you think they will let us in?” Jan asked.
“Hopefully they will Jan.” Kyle told her.
Kyle walked up the steps, with Jan following him. They arrived next to the guards.
“What do you want?” One of the guards asked.
“We need information,” Kyle told the guard, “On the Korr family. We was wondering if the King and Queen knew where they lived.”
“Is it urgent?” The other guard asked.
“Yes.” Kyle told the other guard.
“Well if it’s urgent, the Korr family live in the backstreets of Theed,” The first guard told Kyle, “It’s number twenty five.”
“Thank you.” Kyle told the guards.
Kyle and Jan left the palace and tried to locate the backstreets of Theed.

After several minutes of looking, Kyle and Jan found the backstreets of Theed. They were isolated from the rest of Theed, but people occasionally walked down there. The houses were smaller than the large ones near the palace. Soon, Kyle found number twenty five. He knocked on the door. An elderly woman opened the door.
“Hello, can I help you?” She asked nervously.
“My name is Kyle Katarn,” He told her, “This is my partner Jan Ors. I’m a Jedi and I was your son’s Master.”
“You know Jaden?” She asked, “Please come in. I’ll call my husband down.”
Kyle and Jan entered the house. It was a clean house and it had many pictures of Jaden. Many of them from when he was young and others before he left the Academy. A Protocol Droid and an Astromech Droid entered the room.
“Hello there.” The Protocol Droid told Kyle and Jan, “My name is JK-47 and this is my counterpart, RC-62.”
RC-62 beeped out loudly.
“Don’t be rude to our guests RC,” JK told him, “Please sit down. Our Masters will be here to see you shortly.”
RC asked Kyle and Jan if they wanted anything to drink.
“No thanks.” Kyle and Jan told RC at the same time.
The elderly woman and an elderly man entered the room.
“Droids leave us.” The man told the Droids.
“As you wish,” JK told them, “Come on RC.”
As soon as JK and RC left the room, the elderly man and woman sat down.
“My wife, Michaela has told me that you are Jaden’s Master,” He told Kyle, “I’m Lordo.”
“It’s nice to meet you.” Jan told them.
“Who are you?” Lordo asked.
“I’m Jan Ors, Kyle’s partner,” Jan told him, “However I’m no Jedi.”
Before either Lordo or Michaela could say anything, Kyle started to speak.
“I’m here to tell you some very bad news,” Kyle started, “Your son has fallen to the dark side.”
Both Kyle and Jan noticed Michaela crying slightly. Lordo tried to comfort each his wife.
“That’s… not… true.” Michaela stammered.
“I’m afraid it is,” Kyle told her, feeling like crying as well, “I am trying to find him and bring him back to the light.”
“I hope you succeed.” Michaela told Kyle.
She left the room. Lordo stayed.
“We’re sorry about this.” Jan told Lordo.
“It’s okay,” He told Jan, “It’s just hard to believe Jaden has fallen to the dark side. He was a kind, helpful kid.”
Michaela returned to the room. Kyle decided to try and comfort them.
“Why did you decide to live on Naboo?” Kyle asked.
“When Jaden left for Yavin IV to join the Jedi, we decided to sell our apartment on Coruscant,” Michaela told Kyle, “After all those years of living in the heart of the Empire, we needed to a new life. So we decided to come here.”
“It’s a nice home.” Jan told her.
“Thanks.” Michaela said.
Lordo walked over to a small locker. It contained three datapads. He handed them to Kyle.
“These are datapads that he wrote about his life,” He told Kyle, “I thought you might like to look at them.”
Kyle nodded a thank you, to Lordo and started to take a look at a datapad. It was written when Jaden was nine.

The Galactic Empire has kept us inside our apartment. It is like we are being guarded all the time. I need to be out. Being kept inside is harsh to all the people on Coruscant. The Emperor has some harsh rules. I hope that the Empire disbands and the Republic returns to power.

Kyle took a look at the next journal.

For me, today is a great day in my life. The Empire has been defeated by the Rebel Alliance and rumours are that the Rebel Alliance shall become the New Republic and that the Jedi shall return. My new dream is to become a Jedi Knight like the Jedi before my time. For now, I’ve built a Protocol Droid and an Astromech Droid to help my parents out. They are JK-47 and RC-62.

Kyle took a look at the final journal.

I’m leaving for the Jedi Academy on Yavin IV to become a Jedi Knight. I hope to do some good to the Galaxy. I hope to get rid of the remnants of the Empire and bring peace to the Galaxy. I shall miss my parents and my Droids, but I know they shall be fine.

Kyle thought the last journal was the saddest. Jaden’s dream was to become a Jedi and get rid of the Imperial Remnant. Now Kyle knew that Jaden would never complete his dream.
“Keep them Master Jedi,” Lordo told Kyle, “We have no use for them.”
“Thanks.” Kyle told Lordo.
“I think it’s best we leave.” Jan told Kyle.
“If we bring your son back to the light, we’ll let you know.” Kyle told Lordo and Michaela.
“We’d appreciate that.” Michaela told Kyle.
Kyle and Jan got up and left the house.

They returned to the Raven’s Claw and prepared to leave Naboo. As the Raven’s Claw entered space, Jan asked Kyle a question.
“Where are we going now?”
“Wherever the Force decides to take us.” Kyle told her.

Stay tuned for Chapter VII Reunion

Jason Skywalker 05-27-2006 05:17 PM

Solid chapter with a good plot.I like the journal part.And also,i wonder if you will make the ending similar to JK-DQ.


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