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capt_barbarian 11-30-2002 12:15 PM

rate the start of my star trek story
 
Star Trek
Barbaric

Episode 1
(no name yet)

Captain's log
Stardate[Don't know how the stardate work's yet]
we have been ordered on our first mission.
U.S.S. Jupitor has disappered near the romulan neutral zone
and we have been ordered to find it.
among the crew of the Jupitor is my Best friend from the Academy.
(Captain Jeff S. Hohndorf) computer end log

*Capt. Jeff walk's out of his ready room*
(Capt. Jeff) Set a course for the romulan neutral zone warp 6.
*a tear run's down his face as he give's the order*
(helmsman) Aye sir.
(Capt. Jeff) number one i think i will retire to my quarter's tell me when we get to the romulan neutral zone.
(first officer) yes sir...goodnight Sir.
(Capt. Jeff) thank you number one.
*Capt. Jeff walk's enter's the turbolift*
(Capt. Jeff) Deck 3...HALT!
*Capt. Jeff hit's the turbolift console.*
(Capt. Jeff) resume.
*5 hour's past*
(first officer) we are at the romulan neutral zone sir.
(Capt. Jeff) thank you number one i will meet you on the bridge.
*Capt. Jeff leave's his quarter's and enter's the turbolift*
(Capt. Jeff) Bridge.
*Capt. Jeff enter's the bridge*
(Capt. Jeff) what do you have for us number one.
(first officer) we are geting some odd reading's but we can tell there was a fight.
(science officer) i'm picking up trace's of fereration, romulan and klingon weaponry.
(Capt. Jeff) that doesn't make any sence what are the klingon's doing here.
(first officer) maybe we need to find out.
(Capt. Jeff) yes number one contact the klingon high council.
(first officer) maybe now we can find out what happened to the U.S.S. Jupitor.
(Capt. Jeff) you have the bridge number one i will be in my ready room.
(first officer) yes sir.
(science officer) i am picking 1 more weapon's trace but i can't make it out.
[I'm still coming up with the rest of the story]

obi 11-30-2002 12:19 PM

ok now rate me moving this to the story forum. :)

ShadowTemplar 06-02-2003 10:00 AM

Hmmm... Descriptions wouldn't hurt.

ShadowTemplar - Templar of No God, Champion of No Cause


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