I Like your style, i really do. It's the kind of style that get's me hooked from beginning to end. It's so damn descriptive, and it seems so darn thought out (wich it probably is.) good job. Looking forward to seeing more. But try to keep the posts a it smaller, it's easier for reading.
Lekku, not Loobek. (they were the Twi'leks headtails right?)
Jabba, not Jalba. Unless you're talking about another Hutt.
Twi'lek, not Tw'liek.
Otherwise, well, what i said above. Nice. i hope you don't mind if i try to imitate it? Gave me idea's for a new story myself...