The changes you made just make it confusing, i say keep it simple. I have also already combined them, like this:
Resolved to die, one can be killed.
Resolved to live, one can be captured.
Quick to anger, one can be goaded.
Pure and honest, one can be shamed.
Loving the people, one can be aggravated.
Hating the people, one can be manipulated.
Power comes from knowing that you can strike.
Victory is gained by knowing when to strike.
The Universe is whole.
I have cut some of the lines out that did not fit in with the flow.
Another great idea by the people who brought you beer milkshakes!