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Old 03-10-2006, 08:22 PM   #23
Jae Onasi
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The encyclopedia entries were interesting. I caught the 'the style is slow and smooth, forcing the mind to concentrate...' sentence used twice as well as a few comma/single quote issues, but no biggie. A critic can never get away with grammar mistakes.
I love the richness in the detail of cultural descriptions. I've seen blacksmithing done a fair amount, and the descriptions there are quite accurate.
I enjoyed seeing how the Jedi started, too.
I'm looking forward to more.


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