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Old 03-11-2006, 01:35 AM   #24
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Originally Posted by Jae Onasi
The encyclopedia entries were interesting. I caught the 'the style is slow and smooth, forcing the mind to concentrate...' sentence used twice as well as a few comma/single quote issues, but no biggie. A critic can never get away with grammar mistakes.
Thanks. I had written it down, decided to use the phrase somewhere else, and copied instead of cut. As for commas and single quotes, that is what editing is for. The story is going too well to mess with minor stuff. You guys are reading it as it's written originally.

Originally Posted by Jae Onasi
I love the richness in the detail of cultural descriptions. I've seen blacksmithing done a fair amount, and the descriptions there are quite accurate.
I spent 11 years working at the renaissance pleasure faire in California, so I've watched a lot of smiths showing off.

Originally Posted by Jae Onasi
I enjoyed seeing how the Jedi started, too.
I'm looking forward to more.
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