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Old 05-22-2006, 10:38 AM   #117
Jae Onasi
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Glad to see you back in writing action. I was beginning to despair of another chapter, it had been so long. Well, maybe not _that_ long, but long enough.

One thing--this paragraph stops abruptly:

"He was a little irked to discover that the human was already there. He had been early, the human must have been half an hour or more early. Silently Fortuna watched him. The human was merely sitting there, drinking tea as if he had not a care in the world. His clothing"

Thought you'd want to know that to finish the sentence. I'm one of those people who enjoy the little background details.

Holani reminds me more and more of Mary Pat (one of my favorite Clancy characters).


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