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Old 06-15-2006, 06:59 AM   #178
Jae Onasi
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Nice to see all the endings.
The only issues I had were both small and technical--since lightsabers cauterize as they cut, there would be no blood all over the place when Kyle was beheaded in the DS version of the ending. That would only happen with something like a regular sword. And in the neutral ending, Malus has just created a huge mess, but they let him go. Wouldn't they bring him to justice for all the stuff he'd done when DS?
I wondered how Farra was redeemed, too.
The final battle you used more description, which I liked seeing--I could visualize the scene better.
You wrote a lot for this fic--cool!


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