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Old 07-29-2006, 02:06 AM   #405
Jae Onasi
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Well, I posted a revision to ch. 16. I had to laugh when I saw the comments from my beta-reader--she caught a continuity error that none of us had caught. Originally, I had Jolee telling Jae that Reeca was now a Jedi archivist on Coruscant, and a little while later when he's telling the story where she falls off the cliff, Jae asks 'did she die?' It's been changed now. I also rewrote the Reeca story a bit to reflect their Force user skills better.
I also cleaned up a couple other minor things, so hopefully it flows better.

And I have about a page done in chapter 37. Maybe by the end of the weekend I'll have it done.
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