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Old 08-16-2006, 07:03 PM   #23
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Nice chapter. Short, but nice. I like the villain's name - Xyrus.
A few spelling corrections though, I hope you don't mind:
assassin, not assasin;
too far, not to far;
hesitant, not hasitant;

And a few more pointers, in hope they'll help you improve your fic: the Force and Dark/Light Side, is usually spelled with capital first letters.

~snipped~ Please, no review requests in other threads per forum rules. Thanks, Jae.

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