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Old 01-03-2007, 06:35 AM   #160
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Originally Posted by JediMaster12
You know I am surprised you guys don't see that.
Don't be. I rarely notice those things. The only thing I did notice is what's so obvious that there isn't a person in the world who wouldn't notice it - that you have incorporated elements of Japanese culture into your Avalonian society and into this story and you have done so extremely well.
As for this chapter, again great work. I enjoyed the Chancellor and Lady Mara dialogue, it emphasizes the traits of the Avalonians, but also adds a little mystery when future events are concerned.

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