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Old 01-13-2007, 04:03 PM   #11
Aa! Megami-sama!
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It's a good piece, as it describes before and after the meeting of the Exile and Carth. Nicely done...And Evan got the point, the shortie looks like rushed. Don't rush and take your time.

[Offtopic]God, I need to work on my fic...

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