Thanks for the review mach.
I will try and work on the things you have mentioned to my best ability. My latest chapters does not describe the new character, as Im trying to leave it some mystery. The next chapter will reveal all.
Only one impossible thing? But I want my story to have lots of weird and impossible things. Isn't that ok. :P
Yeh, sorry for the VERY vague description on the giant ship. I will work on this stuff.
Well done on all of your work, and for taking the time to review everything.