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Old 04-18-2008, 05:48 PM   #2
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It's well written, especially the emotions; Revan struggling through overgrowth, constantly having to tell hungry creatures he wasn't that tasty, Jolee's emotion at receiving his wife's lightsaber. The only thing that confused me is Canderous' involvement. Was it a competition between the two of them, to get Nayama's lightsaber?

Still, it's well written and the ending took my focus off my confusion of Canderous being there. And now it's back. Care to enlighten me?

Mom tells me I need brain food... but if writing ain't that, I don't know what is!

My work in progress:
Hidden Histories: The Galaxy Hacker

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