I liked it, although it was a bit short and ended abruptly, could have used a bit more detail and a bit longer.
And there were a few errors, like where it says
"Lirissian wake up! The Spiths are attacking!
You left out a talking mark at the end, and, while the "p" is probably a typo, the "s" shouldn't be there either, as the plural for Sith is just that, "Sith".
All in all, a good chap, keep it up