Thread: [Fic] Triumvirate Wars
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Old 07-10-2008, 07:09 AM   #2
Rabish Bini
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I liked it, although it was a bit short and ended abruptly, could have used a bit more detail and a bit longer.
And there were a few errors, like where it says
"Lirissian wake up! The Spiths are attacking!
You left out a talking mark at the end, and, while the "p" is probably a typo, the "s" shouldn't be there either, as the plural for Sith is just that, "Sith".

All in all, a good chap, keep it up

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