Thread: [Fic] Triumvirate Wars
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Old 07-10-2008, 08:29 AM   #4
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I concur.
A good start, but abrupt, not enough detail and some minor, but also fixable, punctuation problems.
I do hope to see some more, and I hope that you do not let these comments keep you from trying to write more.

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