Thread: [Fic] Triumvirate Wars
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Old 08-01-2008, 11:26 AM   #24
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his heath (heat) resisting armor: stealth generator incorporated in the amour (armor): then he concentrate (concentrates): They alarm, loosing (losing) attention: Some spotlights where (were): the 2 men (man) squad: in an attempt to shot (shoot) him: an attack over Isis (Iziz): The commandant shots (shoots): who is knock-downed (knocked-down): OK thats most of them I think hope I helped and if you ever need someone to proof-read your work then just pm me.


Mandalore-"...we mandalorians are a breed apart."
Kreia-"If by apart you mean broken, scattered, and in piecies then yes."
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