Another nice chapter, and I liked Davrel's part, but there were some errors I noticed, like:
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Originally Posted by TheExile
“Lirissian, look at that rain cloud! It’s coming really quick.”
“Trask… I don’t think that’s a cloud.”
As the so called cloud approaches, it’s becoming more clear for Lirissian.
“That’s a huge group of… flying drexls… WE ARE UNDER ATTACK! Go for bunkers, they will bomb first, and then take high positions! We need to take them out!”
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You should put in who says what after the line, so people don't get confused as to who's speaking, I noticed you did it a couple times.
Overrall, a nice chapter, good work
