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Old 09-26-2008, 01:21 AM   #886
DeadYorick
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Thank you for the review Mach. Yeah I noticed it dragged on a little when I was rereading a few of my chapters.

The water planet thing was a dumb plot twist I planned to introduce later but eventually cut out. So now it looks rather stupid


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