Thread: [Fic] Legacy of the Jedi
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Old 10-12-2008, 05:28 PM   #22
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I have just read this story in one sitting, and I found it to be very enjoyable.

First the suggestions: Garzulan's joining Javen was rather abrupt...though, I think you smoothed it out a bit. Also, I assume everything with Javen's dead mother and all that will be explained?

Now the praise!

I think Javen, Leah, and Garzulan have good chemistry, I loved their dialogue. Garzulan is fast becoming my favorite - his knowing yet freindly manner is very intersting and refreshing. Javen's background has also caught my attention.

Just a question: How is Leah a captain if she is only 19?

You have a good start here and I think this story has a lot of potential. Keep up the good work - happy writing!

~HOP



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