Thread: [Fic] Legacy of the Jedi
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Old 10-12-2008, 07:28 PM   #23
Darth Kalverys
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I have just read this story in one sitting, and I found it to be very enjoyable.

First the suggestions: Garzulan's joining Javen was rather abrupt...though, I think you smoothed it out a bit. Also, I assume everything with Javen's dead mother and all that will be explained?
Yes... the death of the Queen of Onderon will be explained.
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Javen's father is soon to be killed too... and I believe at that point I will explain it.


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Now the praise!
Thank you!

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I think Javen, Leah, and Garzulan have good chemistry, I loved their dialogue. Garzulan is fast becoming my favorite - his knowing yet freindly manner is very intersting and refreshing. Javen's background has also caught my attention.
Ahhh... good, then my intentions for Garzulan are coming to. I intended on him to be the favorite character, even with Javen being the main character. Though, as Javen softens up, he will be ever more like Garzulan...
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I won't tell you why though... so sorry.


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Just a question: How is Leah a captain if she is only 19?
All will be explained in great time. Although, I've hinted at it subtly throughout the story.

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You have a good start here and I think this story has a lot of potential. Keep up the good work - happy writing!

~HOP
I thank you so much, for your kind words. I haven't began chapter four yet... though I plan to within the next hour... I may or may not have it done within four hours. It usually takes me much longer than that, but occassionally I'll have one done if four hours.
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