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Old 10-17-2008, 10:52 AM   #4
Bee Hoon
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Wow, Geric is one confused boy O_o And somewhat slow on the uptake;p Some of the descriptions fit perfectly. I'm a little confused by the implication that the Dark Side was created by Selor (who seems like a cool femme fatale). There's a few mistakes here and there, but nothing major. Good work, but could use some polishing!

The sun goes down and the sky reddens, pain grows sharp.
light dwindles. Then is evening
when jasmine flowers open, the deluded say.
But evening is the great brightening dawn
when crested cocks crow all through the tall city
and evening is the whole day
for those without their lovers

-Kuruntokai 234, translated by A.K. Ramanujan

[Fic] Shreds of a Dying Belief
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