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Old 10-17-2008, 11:20 PM   #15
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Shortly after Luke submitted randomly to who knows where, Han Solo is sitting in front of his computer playing music.
You have written in two completely different tenses within one sentence. Pick one tense to write in and stick with it.

Also it's Coruscant, not Coroscant.

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