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Old 10-18-2008, 01:40 AM   #16
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Originally Posted by Inyri View Post
You have written in two completely different tenses within one sentence. Pick one tense to write in and stick with it.

Also it's Coruscant, not Coroscant.
Thanks for noticing. I do have a tense problem, and the miss spelling will be fixed.


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