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Old 10-19-2008, 07:12 AM   #26
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Originally Posted by Darth_Yuthura
Vrook exclaimed, but got more silent the closer to the end of his sentences.
Mm? What do you mean by this?

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I also knew that Vrook would not strike me, so I had nothing to be afraid of.
Goodness, that shouldn't even be a consideration! As your lovely analogy put it, Vrook is loud but harmless--he is still after all, a very good Jedi, albeit prone to being close-minded, painfully blunt and confrontational.

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“That was an open threat. Fear is often a powerful motivator and it had worked very well for her.
This is pretty odd. If you recall the Jedi code, their first tenet it "There is no emotion, there is peace". I can imagine Vrook intimidating her only either unconsciously, or to teach her a lesson in mastering her emotions.

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That wasn’t what I wanted to do because she was feeling restrained and leaving her alone with no escape would only have made things worse.
Feeling restrained?

All in all, it was an interesting chapter. One thing though: why did the Order take Kalin on at age of 13? Even if they did so, wouldn't it be reasonable to put her through the same training that younglings receive before assigning her to a master, especially one as demanding as Vrook? Kalin's desire to go home was expressed nicely, and she sounds like an emo teenager all right I'd like to see the end of this particular mini story arc before I comment further, so keep writing!



The sun goes down and the sky reddens, pain grows sharp.
light dwindles. Then is evening
when jasmine flowers open, the deluded say.
But evening is the great brightening dawn
when crested cocks crow all through the tall city
and evening is the whole day
for those without their lovers

-Kuruntokai 234, translated by A.K. Ramanujan

[Fic] Shreds of a Dying Belief
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