I would have commented earlier, had I the means to do so.
In regards to "Descending into Revan's Shadow," I was thinking it might be more powerful for me to put the Exile's trial before the fiction "Prior to Exile." These two threads are of the same fiction, but I will have them separated into two sections when they are completed.
I did notice the punctuation and grammar. I often start out with a rough copy, get feedback, and correct the grammar with whatever advice I was given. It was the result of rushing to post the story. Should I really not post something unless I intend to keep it EXACTLY as it is?