Well to start with, it blew my mind. This is the best piece of fiction I've read in CEC for quite a while now, because it appears to be only one that is sincere. Grammar and pacing is excellent for the most part, characters are deep, dialogue reasonable: one of the very few fics I really enjoyed reading. It's nice to see a fic with refined content and editing once in a while.
I was a little disappointed when I saw that it was a collaborative RP fic, because I quite honestly thought we had an expert writer in our midst. Not that it's bad, but I had developed higher expectations.
Bottomline: this is one hell of a fic, and I look forward to more! Welcome to the forums, goddamnit!
The installments may be a little too big. I managed to read through because I liked the writing and content, but people like Mr_BFA get scared by big blocks of text.
Also, you may be interested in Dantooine Theatre Company
, our roleplaying forum which could use some more stuff now. It used to be a lot more active before...
Anyways, keep it up you people.