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Old 12-13-2008, 04:56 AM   #64
Rabish Bini
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Originally Posted by Mr_BFA View Post
Thanks to both you

Here's another one. I'm sure you'll agree with me when I say it's VERY simply written. Not much effort was pt into the structure of this piece. I just wrote and this is what was left. I didn't even look at it until I was done.



- Untitled -

Good-bye.

Sleep now.
There will be no more worries for you.
Call me if you need anything.

Take a deep breath now,
never forget the feeling I had for you.
You don't have to say anything.

I will always try to remember,
everything that I have to forget,
but something that will always stick with me,
is how you played me like a marionette.

I'm not angry.
I'm not sad.
I'm content.

I wish I could feel more.
I know I'll miss you.
It's proven as my heart is still sore.
I will always miss you.

Your laugh,
my smile,
our life will be a life forever.

It's enough,
for a while,
until the next time we'll be together.

I just wished you would have given it another chance.
I hate you, but I love you.
It's sad really.
It's something I can not get.
I'll never forgive you. I'll never respect you again.
But I'll always miss you.

Good-bye.

I don't think it really needs explaining what it is about. I'll just leave it in saying that somethings can go the complete opposite way as to how you want it to sometimes, and that sometimes ... well ... it can hurt more than you want it to.
I'm sorry to say, but you'll probably never top this, masterfully written, puts most professional poets to shame, kudos to you Mr_BFA, kudos to you


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