Thread: [Fic] The Devil Within
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Old 12-17-2008, 07:52 PM   #20
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I concur, that was a great chapter! Very entertaining.

I did notice some areas were it was a little bit hard to determine who was talking, such as:

“I’ve finally awakened,” He smiled before he turned and left the room."

There are a few others, but I just can't seem to find them....

Good chapter though

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