:Nod: I concur.
A good job. Nice telling us about Arch's un-natural taste for killing.
Liking this story.
Keep it up!
And yeahp, there's a part in there where you say DI-17 instead of DC-17, but anyways.
Apart from that, this was the only other thing I noticed...
Originally Posted by Rakata Dark
I was already to excited about being armed with a weapon
Supposed to be: too
Not that big I know but lol ... As I said: only other thing I noticed.