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Old 01-19-2009, 08:18 PM   #2
Tysyacha
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You managed to fit quite a bit of introspection and philosophy into a very short space. If this is your first try at a Javyar's fic, congratulations! It's a handsome start. My only suggestions would be to break up the paragraphs and perhaps add a little more description of one of his most famous (or infamous) battles. Kudos to you!
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