Thread: [NSW-Fic] The Dragonfighters
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Old 02-19-2009, 11:45 AM   #5
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The scene was well-written, as previous posters have said It's well polished and is very traditional fantasy--not a bad thing in itself, but it;s too early to say as we haven't seen much of the plot yet The fight descriptions are smooth and detailed, while the Fest'ari sound interestingly sentient--if so, why attack in swarms that would surely see heavy losses? Hopefully there will be more on the different factions and prcisely why Jailyn's village was attacked!

P.S. I like Daerved's name :3

The sun goes down and the sky reddens, pain grows sharp.
light dwindles. Then is evening
when jasmine flowers open, the deluded say.
But evening is the great brightening dawn
when crested cocks crow all through the tall city
and evening is the whole day
for those without their lovers

-Kuruntokai 234, translated by A.K. Ramanujan

[Fic] Shreds of a Dying Belief
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