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Old 03-05-2009, 08:06 PM   #2
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A very interesting start here Kyvios.

You did a great job of capturing the reader's attention, the words flowed nicely, and you added a classic Star Wars element with the phantom in the cave. *remembers RotJ.*

A few typos such as "disapproval look" should be disapproving look, but that is extremely minor. Anyone who has read anything I wrote will tell you I have numerous typos. I look forward to future installments from you whether they be from this fic or another.

~HOP



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