Originally Posted by Adavardes
"The tree held upon its branches a thousand emerald butterflies, each fluttering their delicate wings in rhythm with the unpredictable flow of the wind, proving order to chaos."
Are you really going to sit there and tell me that the former is better than the latter, simply because it uses fewer words?
Very poetic and impressive; likely written by one who achieved a mastery of words.
This is not accurate to my argument, however. If this were to describe what the movement of leaves on a tree reminded a viewer of, then the subject would not be that the tree's leaves fluttered with the wind. One is a literal description where the other is how the leaves were perceived by the viewer/reader.
The ideas communicated in this and the first sentence are different.