dude, pretty good. I like the way you change the story and Darth SINner is right, so fix it and some grammatical errors here and there but otherwise pretty cool
"Lies from the tablecloth...La La La La La La La La La La...Ooooh!"
BYOB - System Of A Down
oh sorry u already fixed it
~merged posts, and am wondering what System Of A Down has to do with this fanfiction.
"I am Synyster Gates, and I am awesome!" - Brian Elwin Haner (announcing his stage name during a drunk drive through the park with The Rev)
Last edited by Bee Hoon; 05-07-2009 at 03:38 AM.