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Old 09-07-2009, 07:51 PM   #5
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Originally Posted by Darth InSidious View Post
If you must ask ( ), the word "door" is repeated, it doesn't read particularly pleasantly and it's devoid of spark. I blame this post entirely on you, mach, and on you alone.

Oh, the passage also has two consecutive entrances both constructed in the same way, and mismatched description with those going left having no clear explanation as to what is left.
Exactly my point. When entering a building, left and right is subjective, whereas aboard ship it would be heading inboard and turning either fore or aft. Anyone visualizing the ship's deck plan would immediately place the location of the intruders as to which side of the ship they boarded. Oh, BTW, I do not waste effort on a throwaway paragraph to prove a point.


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