Again, most excellent. This second part didn't grab my interest as well as the first one had, but still, very good.
I love the writing style you're using. Something about it radiates the purity and sweetness of the protagonist, driving home the sharp contrast between her and her stepfather.
...Okay, that probably sounded really dumb.
PS: My sis will love the description of the wedding dress.
Chapter 12 of A Soul Adrift
: On the planet Felucia, a young apprentice of the Dark Side thinks back to the beginning of her training as she lies in wait for her prey...
All the Time
: After four years in the Unknown Regions, the Exile returns to the known galaxy to visit an old enemy.
: A master of the Dark Side finds himself about to lose the one thing he cares about--and he will do anything to stop her from endangering herself.