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Old 09-30-2010, 08:55 PM   #4
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Wow, oh wow... yah, this one's got my vote too.

When I started reading, I couldn't stop. Felt sorry for Yeron, how he spent all that time doing what he thought was right to protect his little girl. Just goes to show that what you think is right isn't always. Her reaction to discovering his betrayal is what you'd expect of a Dark Jedi in training; then, the realization that she's just killed her own father brings out the little kid she'd have been years ago were it not for having been deprived of a normal childhood.

Reactions are realistic and well written. The story follows a logical progression of events to a satisfying, if very sad conclusion. Very well done!


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