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Old 10-01-2010, 01:24 PM   #5
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This I find to be a nice reflection of what happens when you do things with the best intentions in mind. What I found interesting was that Yeron, while an agent of evil almost seemed to fluctuate between total dark side and grey Jedi. This is partly influenced by the fact that Sathine is his daughter. The character development of Yeron was well thought out and I like how you inserted bits of flashbacks from his life.

The last part with the girl calling Daddy was just the right touch. Also a bit of deja vu with Anakin realizing that he killed in cold blood. Good job.

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