Hahaha! Okay, wasn't exactly expecting that.
I'm guessing that Valen WON'T get out of this scot-free...
As I said about the first chapter, this could stand to be longer. The incident documented in this chapter is funny, but the story still hasn't grabbed my interest. (Not that I won't read the next chapter--I'm looking forward to the point where I'm having to restrain myself from sending you PMs every day bugging you about the next part.
Other than that, I have no complaints. The dialogue and grammar are solid, and the characters are shaping up nicely.
Chapter 12 of A Soul Adrift
: On the planet Felucia, a young apprentice of the Dark Side thinks back to the beginning of her training as she lies in wait for her prey...
All the Time
: After four years in the Unknown Regions, the Exile returns to the known galaxy to visit an old enemy.
: A master of the Dark Side finds himself about to lose the one thing he cares about--and he will do anything to stop her from endangering herself.