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Old 01-23-2011, 11:38 AM   #1178
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Zero-Sum Game: Ch. 2
Tysyacha

Post KOTOR: There is always time for a prank...

Like all of Tys' stuff, this was well done. Reprogramming a droid to act as comic relief was fun and the snap choice of who would give the lecture instead a riot.

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kotorfanmedia

Lost Jedi chapter 1 Aftermath
Darth Red Head

Post TSL: The Exile deals with the loss of Atton, and the future

The piece is well done and the feeling and voice of each character is distinct and clear. The angst felt by not only the main character but all who journey with her comes through like a carillon of bells. The ending, with another dark fate on the horizon is very well done.

Technical note: It is a common problem for people to use common words landsmen would use but applying them to ship areas. Please read the website below Ship nomenclature, or; It's not a door, it's a hatch blast it! Machievelli for the correct terms.

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Rogue Lady-Rogue Jedi
RogueLadySabyne

Post KOTOR: Revan deals with the death of her mother.

RLS has always turned out quality work, and this is no exception. The ritual of cutting her hair to leave on her mother's grave fits with her anger at the Council.

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Past Mistakes; Prologue
Nivenus

Post KOTOR: Dustil's training under of all people, Jolee

It should be take over (Present tense) rather than took (Past tense)

The piece flowed well, and Dustil's rationalization of why his renewed attack perfectly done.

Fearless
RC773

KOTOR aboard Endar Spire: The death and soon to be rebirth of Trask Ulgo.

You left a word out 'you (into) a monster'.

The piece flowed well, and one reviewers comment was welcome, since there are few Trask stories out there

Bastila's Touch
Joysweeper

Pre KOTOR: Bastila's thoughts on what has been done to Revan

The piece is a clear concise rendition of how Revan becomes the main character. The specifications are tight, and you can follow step by step what had been done to mold the nascent mind.

Alive Chapter 1-Hunters
Kagi Vayun

Pre KOTOR: With Revan dead (He thinks) Bastila is now the primary target

The piece has a smooth flow and the bounty hunter chosen is perfect for the job.

Fanfiction.net

The Jedi and the Jacket
Woman of Rohan

Post KOTOR: A man and his jacket...

The piece is thoroughly delightful. It reminds me of a commercial from the 70s when a woman is traipsing around in her boyfriend's shirt, accepting a call and blithely answers, 'Oh, I was just thinking about you'.

Worth every second of the read.

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KOTOR II Retold
N-Android

Pre TSL: A paid of Jedi prepare to go on their adventure.

Should be console instead of council Also 'you're (You are) rather than your (Possessive). Also through (past) rather than threw (hurled) and deleted rather than deleated. Also off instead of speaking of signs of life. Also the body lay, not lied, and the woman was calm (relaxed) not clam (Shellfish).

Didn't have a chance to read beyond chapter 1, but that was enough to know it is quality work.

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The Leviathan
CortessaBlatt

It's thrashed instead of trashed.

The scene is well laid out, the Sith merely continuing the torment because they were ordered to.

Darkness
Setre

No specific era given: What you must do as a Sith.

The piece is cold and hard. If you have read the Extended Universe, you will remember Iron Fist, where Republic warriors pretending to be mercenaries are given the choice to kill a captured agent. The difference is that there is no timer pretending the man is alive; it is three children killed because 'they will come back to attack when they get older'.

Mirrored Paths
Jakia

TSL on Peragus: The twin Jedi go their opposite ways to carry out the same mission.

The piece is well laid out, the separate Jedi complementing each other .

The Night She Left
Trillian4210

Post KOTOR: Neither spoke of it... Until it was too late

The piece is excellent!. You have two point of views (You need to work in a break there, kid) with Revan breaking down because of her own ghosts, followed by Carth exploding when he discovers her gone. You want to bitch-slap both of them because they aren't thinking about the partner.

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