An interesting perspective about the Exile and how she saw what Revan did to her companions during the Star Forge quest. There was some slight confusion at the beginning. A writer's tool I suggest is to use the italics and write something like "The Ebon Hawk, Five Years Ago." It sets up the setting of the story and since you have that twist at the end where it is a meditation vision, it just makes it more enticing and wondering about what is going on.
It is a very good piece and I encourage a possible second companion piece.