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Old 03-26-2011, 11:22 PM   #13
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Nice to see another chapte. You should seriously consider writing for the challenges.

Again minor grammar issues but nothing obtrusive. The overall arc of the chapter worked really well with the flashback becoming the story that the Exile is telling Mission and Zalbaar. You dangle the thread of Mical's evilness but never giving the full details as to why he is now what he is. That suspense is good and keeps the reader begging for more. Again another great chapter and I look forward to more.

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