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Old 04-26-2011, 12:03 AM   #19
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Nice intro into how Zaalbar lost his arm. You gave just enough to explain it but you hung back to give a little suspense. Nice move since it keeps me wondering what's going to happen next.

Mission's generosity in her thoughts and actions are dead on. Even though she is a street rat from Taris, she hasn't let the life harden her. Glad you kept that characterization up. Good job.

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