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Old 06-30-2011, 08:48 PM   #22
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Glad that after a long hiatus Chev came back with two chapters for me to read.

I can honestly scream to the heavens in a cheer that Juhani made an appearance seeing that she is one of my fav characters. I find it interesting that you have her as a refugee on Kashyyyk but then again I am assuming that the planet is like other places with a strong connection to the Force and one can mask themselves in it.

The direction of the story is progressing nicely and it seems that you have adopted the cliffhanger approach for your chapters. There is nothing wrong with that and I think it provides a great means of keeping your readers hanging on.

The characterization with Mical is progressing nicely even though it seems out of character for him. However you have made up for it by writing it into the story. Keep up the good work Chev.

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