Thread: [Fic] Just keep Running
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Old 07-05-2011, 07:34 PM   #24
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Well it's nice to see that you brought my favorite old man into the story. It puts a nice twist on things and I can see Jolee coming back even though he says that he had enough of the trees. Nice plot element as well as Mical's realization that the exile's allies were a part of her strength.

On a technical note, just minor spelling and grammar issues. Most can be attributed to flubby fingers like mine when I mispell basic words. Nothing too distracting. Overall nice connection and you seem to like them cliffhangers. Looking forward to the next chapter.

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